ASK FOR THE DANCE (commented) - A Short Story from Dennis Lowery

Ask for the Dance (Short Fiction: Escrire)


I’ve been an entrepreneur and business investor/owner since 1993. I’m also a father of four and uncle to several young people ranging from pre-teen to young adult (late 20s). I know how important just a handful of guidelines have been (still are) in my life, career and business. All are relatively simple but often not easy to follow or execute when you’re young. So, I wrote a story for my children, nieces and nephews that they might relate to that would teach them a couple of oh, so important principles for success. I think the story has a message everyone can take away as an important lesson.

A Coming of Age Story (with excellent advice for adults, too).

Josh has a crush on a pretty, popular–and taller– upper-class girl at his high school. He wants to ask her out but is afraid and his father and mother give him the best advice any kid could receive. The type of advice that has a lifelong impact.

Here’s what some of my early readers had to say about this 3,024-word short story:

ASK FOR THE DANCE (cover and original inspiration) from Dennis Lowery“A story about good parents who give the right advice, and how a smart kid can learn the right lessons from that advice. This is a Must Read.” -Jyoti Q Dahiya

“This has touched my heart.” -Vickie Farnsley

“Great story!” -Dirk Hooper

“That was such a beautiful story, brings back sweet memories.” -Paul Wing,

“Love it!” -BF

“Wow, that was amazing!!” -Queen Rae

“You have such mad talent! ♥ this!” -Cindy Corhn

“Great writing, Dennis. You are enormously talented. From a man who hates to admit any romantic inclinations, I want a do-over for high school.” -Gerald Shackelford

“Truly enjoyed it, Dennis.” -Denis Labelle

“Great read Dennis! ‘And chances are you will fail—at many things—if you’re trying to live a life of purpose and meaning to yourself.’ That’s some very sage advice.” -GP

“I love this story!” -Jenn R

“A beautiful story.” -Rebecca Fowler

“This left me grinning from ear to ear.” -Dawn Hart Jackson

“Young love… a great story! Loved it!” –Susan Gabriel

From Dennis:

One day I saw a picture of a statue in a park: of a male figure (smaller) reaching out to a female figure (taller) and a thought—a premise— struck me. So, I wrote a story that most of us can relate to, to illustrate a point about how our fears, our uncertainty, can hold us back… can stall or prevent success.

I have four daughters and one of my wishes for them is that they find a partner in life that is as thoughtful, considerate and brave as Josh in this story. And as I wrote it, I wanted to make a point (for them since they’re usually some of the earliest readers of all I write), that you get nowhere in life if you don’t take an active role in making it—life—become what you want. Now, I’m 58 (as of this writing). I know all about questions and regrets as you age and reflect on life. When there’s something you want(ed), or an opportunity before you… and you don’t (didn’t) do what you need(ed) to do to get it or don’t (didn’t) give it a shot. I want my daughters (and other readers) to know of something easy to lose sight of in the ‘busyness’ of life… that lives are formed by choices. By what’s done… or not done.

Josh’s last bit of advice to his friend Ben holds true. And sometimes that dance partner is yourself. Swing out even if no one else is on the floor… and here I’ll quote a song by Lee Ann Womack. Sing it with me:

“I hope you never fear those mountains in the distance. Never settle for the path of least resistance. Livin’ might mean takin’ chances, but they’re worth takin’… I hope you dance…”

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